Mob Mentality


Depose the leader
Let not the majority rule
I am the mob
My force will carry through

No country is exempt
No sacrosanct venue
My wish will be the rule
Above reason and review

In all of men’s affairs
I will have my way
At great matters of state
And even when we play

No one can stop my cry
In anger from the crowd
I will rise to the front
My voice shall be allowed

Those in power have no hold
Over millions on the street
And though they rein us in
Our victory will be complete

In countries near and far
We have made our bloody way
The gravestones mark our victories
We know no other way

Les

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 08/25/2006 06:01PM by lg.

Les, nice poem. I liked the way the rhythm seemed to make it march from beginning to end, like a mob would.

Thanks Bob. Some scenes on TV triggered this.

Les

I didn't catch the marching rhythm, but I do like this. Great message, Les. Thanks.

Any scenes in particular?

Lady of the Night

Lady, there was a newsreel about the revolution in Georgia, the Russian state.

Les

I do hear the march in this, it's strong, angry and proud!

Great job Les! I love this piece more because it was inspired by fact!

It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)

Thanks, Gwydion, it's fun to write fantasy. But it's also good to keep your eyes open to what's going on around you, I think.

Les

Les,

Yes, taken from the headlines or from a newsreel. There is a universal feel to this poem as it has been repeated and will be repeated as long as there are mobs. Good job, Les.

jhs

Thanks, J. H. I think where ever people gather there will be a type of non-thinking action produced.

Les

Lots to think about in this poem Les. I never fail to be amazed at the mentality and brutality of a mob. It puts mankind a little lower than the animals.

JP

I agree, JP, I didn't really capture the brutality here. I'll have to address that in another poem I guess.

Les

It's a fine poem, Les. I think you might improve the stanza by sharpening the rhyme there. Cruel might be a good word in the context. I would also suggest 'The powerful' as an alternate opening for the fifth stanza.

Thanks, Chesil. Looking back on it, I noticed that I switched from singular to plural half way through. Here's a revised edition.

Mob Mentality


Depose the leader
Hide the majority’s view
We are the mob
Our force will carry through

No country is exempt
No sacrosanct venue
Our wish will be heard
Above reason and review

In all of men’s affairs
We will have our way
At great matters of state
And even when we play

No one can stop our cries
In anger from the crowd
We will rise to the front
Our voice will be allowed

The powerful have no hold
Over millions in the street
And though they rein us in
Our victory will be sweet

In countries near and far
We have had our bloody say
The gravestones mark our victories
We know no other way

Les

Bump! there just is no hiding from fact, fine work!

It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)

Thanks, Gwydion.

Les

The revised version is better and much more convincing.

Debutant

I agree, Debutant, I should have noticed the difference in the draft.

Les

Bravo, Les-



wicked

Thanks, Wicked.

Les

Les- I missed this -- am glad I caught up with it........powerful words....does make one think---and I more than agree with JP---very well done...Ell

Thanks, Ell, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Les

I also didn't catch this the first time around, Les. It's definitely a nice piece of work. It has a good flow and gets its message across.

Thanks Brandon, I appreciate your reading it.

Les

 Les , a strong piece with good flow. I like it unquestionably. If I had to point out 1 thing for someone twisting my arm it would have to be the lack of punctuation.<br />
I would have found it easier to read if you had put the emphasis where you wanted it.

PUE, thanks for the comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I have some poems with punctuation, some without. It's basically a gut feeling I have at the time I'm writing that determines whether or not to include it in the poem.

Les

Les,

I think that in this poem's case, the line breaks are acting as the punctuation.

Certainly a mob isn't going to stop for anything, and especially not to argue whether there should be a comma or a semi-colon. (well, not unless it's an eMule mob!)

pam

Poetic "justice", anyone? Thanks Pam, that made me chuckle.


Les

Roughly translated:

We are Borg
Resistance is futile
You will be assimilated

"I "Love Summer more than I hate Winter"

Shameless self-promotion.


Les

Oh yes, Jean-Paul...I remember him...he left after his shabby treatment here

Seems to me he never posted many poems. Just talked a lot. Here's a link to all of his posts: [www.emule.co.uk] />
Les

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 08/25/2006 11:05PM by lg.

Smooth yet potent, Les.
Excellent as ever-

~

wicked

Thanks Wicked. Good to see your name on the board again.

Les

I remeber reading this before and commenting. Seems not. Well, I like the images and sense the poem portrays. However, I have learnt that there is at least the slightest truth in what mobs dramatize. You just have to be skilled in peeling off the thick skin to see.

Les,

I enjoyed this one immensely. If all of your poems are as good as this one is, you should definitely write more!

There are only two ways that a mob can be controlled.
1. It runs its course, or
2. you remove the instigators. Even in a mob there are leaders, those that are actively inciting it. If those are removed from the quotient, the mob disappates.
ergo. Nothing that a few well placed snipers can't cure.

Sincerely,
Brucefur

If all of your poems are as good as this one is, you should definitely write more!

Thanks Bruce, I shall write more even if they're all worse than this. I write for my own enjoyment not the praise/criticism of others.


Les

you don't seem to post many

you don't seem to post many

True, prolific, I'm not.


Les

You have the best motive of all for writing, my friend. I hope you stay with that.

Peter

Considering the recent events in the Middle East, I thought I would revisit this one. After reading it over again, I think my rhyme scheme in the original post, or lack thereof, is terrible. The version below seems to flow more smoothly.


Les

Depose the leader
Hide the majority’s view
We are the mob
Our force will carry through

No country is exempt
No sacrosanct venue
Our wish will be heard
Above reason and review

In all of men’s affairs
We will have our way
At great matters of state
And even when we play

No one can stop our cries
In anger from the crowd
We will rise to the front
Our voice will be allowed

The powerful have no hold
Over millions in the street
And though they rein us in
Our victory will be sweet

In countries near and far
We have had our bloody say
The gravestones mark our victories
We know no other way

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 02/27/2011 02:08PM by les712.

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I remember this one, Les. Very interesting how it suits the events!

K.Q.

Khalida, great to see you posting. It's funny how certain poems come back into fashion over time.

Les

Hi, Khalida. Hope you're well. I too am happy to see you at the mule.

amo et avanti,

Peter