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My poem - comments please
Posted by: HTN (---.rmt.net.pitt.edu)
Date: May 21, 2022 05:54PM

I like trying to see what other people are feeling so I put it in a poem. So here I go:
Closer to Fear
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Staring relentlessy at the mirror,
I see nothing but a stranger.
The gifts I use bring me only danger;
Cold dead fingers seize me closer to fear.
Those can't be my hands,
That I use to kill.
Strike the bow of my own free will,
And give my cry of war to all the lands.
Are those my lips that allow me to curse?
I don't know what's worse,
Than causing tears to drip.
All that I possess,
Could be used for good.
I know that I should,
But I'm considered less.
Cold, terrifying sweat rolls down my cheeks;
Afraid of what I will become.
I'm nothing but a nuisance to some,
Just weary, quiet, and weak.
Staring relentlessy at the mirror,
I see nothing but a stranger.
The gifts I use bring me only danger;
Cold dead fingers seize me closer to fear.


Re: My poem - comments please
Posted by: Olivier (---.11-203-24.mtl.mc.videotron.ca)
Date: May 21, 2022 07:22PM

I like it. What gave you the idea to write it?


Re: My poem - comments please
Posted by: HTN (---.rmt.net.pitt.edu)
Date: May 22, 2022 07:22PM

This one friend of mine is always judged differently just because he's quiet and bad-tempered. There's more to it, but too hard for me to explain.


Re: My poem - comments please
Posted by: Sarah aka Twisted Poet (149.152.122.---)
Date: May 24, 2022 01:29PM

This is a really good poem. I really enjoyed and I was able to apply it to feelings I have felt before. After seeing your poem, I may post some of my works on this site too. Keep up the work and allow yourself to be freed by writing you true feelings.




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