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Homesick
Posted by: JP (---.essex1.com)
Date: May 19, 2022 10:42AM

The yellow gorse upon the hill,
The bluebell woods below,
Oh how I wish to be there still,
Maybe one day I'll go.

This foreign field is bare and sere
No scents to waken me,
No clouds hung low, or sweet breezes blow,
Nothing for miles to see.

So I close my eyes, and I can see
There in the woods below,
The bluebells sway, and I can play
In those fields of long ago.


Re: Homesick
Posted by: JP (---.essex1.com)
Date: May 19, 2022 02:07PM

Verse 2 sounds better
This foreign field is bare and sere
No scents to waken me
No clouds hung low, nor breezes blow
Nothing for miles to see.


Re: Homesick
Posted by: HTN (---.rmt.net.pitt.edu)
Date: May 19, 2022 05:58PM

I thought that your poem was nice. I also feel a bit homesick at times, too, so I know how you feel. Is there a particular place that you wanted to go to?


Re: Homesick
Posted by: JP (---.essex1.com)
Date: May 19, 2022 09:15PM

Yes, England


Re: Homesick
Posted by: LadybugMary (---.ELRA.splitrock.net)
Date: May 19, 2022 09:53PM

JP
I felt your homesickness however, I also felt your love of home. Its
good to have the memories and still be able to mind play sweet home!

Mary...aka Ladybug


Re: Homesick
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: May 19, 2022 11:39PM

I think it's a fine poem and it reminded me of the place that I'm homesick for.


Re: Homesick
Posted by: albert meyburgh (---.bc.hsia.telus.net)
Date: May 20, 2022 03:53AM

very nice very nice... makes me wanna go back to places of yonder childhood.. or something =)


Re: Homesick
Posted by: silent siren (---.ber.dial.de.colt.net)
Date: May 26, 2022 05:40PM

Now this is a real theme of yours, right? Still you turn it out differently with every new poem. I like to see also how you try to improve them.

siren, as always




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