Something about you makes me threatened.
I don't know what it is, or even what you are,
but instinctively I recoil within myself.
I am the only one I trust, the only one I know
for an absolute certainty won't hurt me. So
slowly I draw away and watch the world
around me get smaller and smaller, shrinking
and distorting until voices sound underwater.

Finally, I am alone. Just me and the voices
in my head, my own third party objective
point of view. And it is only my opinion that
counts, so I'll chastise and grow within
my cocoon until one day I emerge more successful
and beautiful than you ever imagined. Idyllic.
Yes, I'll be my own parent,
mentor,
master,
slave driver,
tyrant,
dom
until I'm strong enough to withstand even the
acid rain of Sodom. Wait... what are you doing?

...This wasn't supposed to hurt.

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Critiques always welcome.

Lady of the Night

According to Socrates,or Plato, above the entrance to the temple of Delphi, seat of some oracle or some such, are the words "Know Thyself". Seems odd to me that that very base of wisdom isn't prevalent in societal thoughts. Point being, I find that being one's own master is the only way to live.

That's all well and good if you're a kind master and not a tyrannical dom.

Critiques always welcome.

Lady of the Night

If I may you ever imagined I think would be better "you've imagined" Your thoughts ? Sadness that's all I read here. I wish it flowed better. Just doesn't for me. Nice writing there LOTN

Depends. The harshest leaders can be the most effective. The kindest can be the least competent. Then again, must a leader be harsh if their subordinates are competent? Who's to say. But you, a dom? Have you been picking on weak men again?

But you know it takes you on a journey in a sad way but as suggesting that that's ok you're enjoying being alone..Until the end and it's as though you think to yourself or regret. Or maybe it's just me putting myself in my own world.. :/

Dying,

You wish it flowed better? Hmmm... I thought it flowed :/ Specific suggestions as to how I can make it flow better? I used "you ever imagined" because it, in my opinion, gives an air of strength and haughtiness over "you." Also, in the end I realize that I'm alone, but that I've criticized, hedged and dominated myself so much that it began to be an unhealthy self-destruction.

Perci,

Harsh leaders may be effective, but they are not loved. And considering in this case I was being harsh to myself, "Myself" ended up hating me. You make a good point about there not being a need for a harsh leader if the subjects are competent, but that doesn't apply here.

And no, I've not been picking on weak men again. They can't hold my attention.

Critiques always welcome.

Lady of the Night

Em, it's tricky. Willing subjects are rather necessary for harshness to work, that or a willingness to bend people against their will. But people can often do a lot more than they can imagine, when forced. Complex topic.