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Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: February 25, 2022 06:15PM

a deep breath
a shudder
you invade my system
with maddening
propulsion of heart
that can only
be described
as love

a whisper
a sigh
all the denial
we hold
so tightly
by design
can only betray us
in the end

your intrusion-
forcing your way
in to my thoughts
blocking my way
to the rational
and stretched far
beyond the bounds
of reason

warning signs
flashing all around
every red flag
waving furiously
before me
and all I can do
is continue
to invite you in


Re: unlocked
Posted by: les712 (68.116.94.---)
Date: February 26, 2022 02:10AM

A strong emotional poem, Sherry. Nicely done.

Les


Re: unlocked
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: February 26, 2022 09:24PM

thanks, Les


Re: unlocked
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 27, 2022 09:08AM

Excellent poem, Sherry. The introspective truth expressed in the second verse really stands out. Well done!

Joe


Re: unlocked
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 27, 2022 05:16PM

ditto, ditto.

Peter


Re: unlocked
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: March 01, 2022 08:37PM

guys, I was not feeling to hot about this one. I'm glad it was well received and I greatly appreciate the time you took to read and comment. thank you.

Sherry


Re: unlocked
Posted by: les712 (68.185.65.---)
Date: March 02, 2022 12:30AM

I think this part is really good:

blocking my way
to the rational
and stretched far
beyond the bounds
of reason



Les


Re: unlocked
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: March 03, 2022 07:28PM

thanks, Les.




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