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Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 17, 2022 03:06AM

Eating Off the Palate of the Poor

The self-important
Don’t look down at their feet.
They don’t even look down at you.
They look only at their desires

This is a test card
Goodbye
Summary slipshod rebellion
Tracing hagioscopic poetry
Preventive medicines
And good vibrations wending up the stream

This is echoes lost
Places to please
Dreams dipping in accent
Return to Cosby, Stills and Nash down by the meadow
From inside the joke

We are
Where we are going
Today

I have no trials to pass
Checking my pulse
Instead of the lock on the door
I can look up to you
If you can look straight
Ahead

Date: circa 1840: an opening
In the interior walls
Of a cruciform church
So placed as to afford
A view of the altar
To those in the transept

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 02/18/2010 01:54PM by petersz.


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: les712 (68.116.88.---)
Date: February 17, 2022 01:09PM

Much food for thought here, Peter. I enjoyed the read.

Shouldn't the last paragraph be separated from the rest of the poem?


Les


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 17, 2022 04:16PM

Thanks, Les. I love your ability to read carefully, here demonstrated by the accuracy of your question about the final stanza, which is the definition of 'hagioscopic. Did you get the joke in stanza 3? Also, there's a submerged pun in the title.

amo,

Peter

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 02/17/2010 04:17PM by petersz.


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 17, 2022 04:20PM

Les, does that change satisfy your sense of seperation between the last stanza and the rest of the poem?

Peter


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: les712 (68.116.88.---)
Date: February 17, 2022 06:23PM

Pete, as long as it creates no confusion among your other readers, I'm fine with it.
But you could do something like this also:

I have no trials to pass
Checking my pulse
Instead of the lock on the door
I can look up to you
If you can look straight
Ahead
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------
N.B., Date: circa 1840: an opening
In the interior walls
Of a cruciform church
So placed as to afford
A view of the altar
To those in the transept


Les


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 18, 2022 03:22AM

[2/17/2010 5:07 PM]

Les,

I thought of that of five asterisks, but believe such a graphic device might break the piece's integrity. I don't want the last stanza to read too much like a footnote, ala Eliot, though it tends that way anyway I look at it.

Thanks for the suggestion...back to the original, methinks. If the forum will let me post a final change...after this comment.

Peter


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: les712 (68.185.71.---)
Date: February 18, 2022 06:38AM

The forum administrators are asleep at the wheel, good luck with your revisionism, Pete.

Les

p.s. Aren't you going to tell us what a transept is?

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 02/18/2010 06:40AM by les712.


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 18, 2022 01:59PM

Gee, do I do all the homework for yah?

The transept is the area set crosswise to the nave in a cruciform ("cross-shaped") building in Romanesque and Gothic Christian church architecture. The transept separates the nave from the sanctuary, whether apse, choir, chevet, presbytery or chancel. The transepts cross the nave at the crossing, which belongs equally to the main nave axis and to the transept. Upon its four piers, the crossing may support a spire, a central tower (see Gloucester Cathedral) or a crossing dome. Since the altar is usually located at the east end of a church, a transept extends to the north and south. The north and south end walls often hold decorated windows of stained glass, such as rose windows, in stone tracery. -- Wiikipedia


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: les712 (68.185.71.---)
Date: February 18, 2022 02:20PM

Gee, do I do all the homework for yah?

I'm chuckling Pete, since I had just looked it up on google. I enjoyed the play on words in your title here also.


Les


Re: Eating Off the Palate of the Poor
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 18, 2022 04:48PM

Les,

Thanks. I'm enjoying the interchange on this with you.

Peter




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