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Approval
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: January 30, 2022 06:20PM

Approval

Approval
In the halls of madness
Approval
In the world of toys
Means
It’s not always good
When its
Good
Not always
Bad when
I hear the airplanes
When I think I’m alone
I’m hearing the music
Play backwards
Through the transcript
Losing the language again
The new one
The first one
The one I speak to myself…
Speaks without me…
I get to start over,
Every day.


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Re: Approval
Posted by: les712 (66.189.173.---)
Date: February 01, 2022 12:41PM

I like the flow here, Pete. Nicely done.

Les


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Re: Approval
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 02, 2022 03:24AM

Thanks, Les. I found it reads well out loud at the reading tonight.

Peter


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Re: Approval
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: February 25, 2022 11:16AM

this is fantastic, Peter!


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Re: Approval
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 27, 2022 05:11PM

Thanks, Frosty. I didn't want to write it.

Cheers,

Peter


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