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Laden
Posted by: mg (64.12.116.---)
Date: December 19, 2021 06:55PM

Laden

I must not think too much
Surrounded by colors, textures, objects...
I must avoid the tempting triggers
That would have me reminisce

Must not dissect the choices
Nor mark the endings
It is all too sad, too hard
And still too raw

Joy clothes the simple
And so I must look back
When feelings, old appendages
Grow cold, numb and dead

My antidote. I will forget.

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 12/19/2009 08:38PM by mg.


Re: Laden
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.178.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 12:38AM

Easier said than done, mg. I can relate to the feelings of loss expressed here.

Mary


Re: Laden
Posted by: mg (64.12.116.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 12:57AM

Mary, thank you for reading and commenting. You're right, definitely easier said than done.

mg


Re: Laden
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 12:23AM

I wish to forget
and the effort is colored
with wishfulness,
washing away the forgetfulness
again.

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 12/26/2009 08:01PM by petersz.


Re: Laden
Posted by: mg (96.246.14.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 04:00PM

I like that Peter. Thanks for coming by.


Re: Laden
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.174.129.---)
Date: December 26, 2021 01:13PM

mg...simplify and let a little of that joy fall around you smiling smiley

I enjoyed the reflection in this one


Re: Laden
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (94.249.18.---)
Date: December 28, 2021 07:01PM

I also find this very touching and very insightful. "raw" justifies waiting. Colaborating with time is one key. I like how you put the last stanza:

Joy clothes the simple
And so I must look back
When feelings, old appendages
Grow cold, numb and dead

My antidote. I will forget.

I love the idea of "antidote"; however, I think that "dead" and to "forget" are not quite possible. I too was there on many occasions and empathise!

K.Q.


Re: Laden
Posted by: mg (64.12.116.---)
Date: December 28, 2021 11:10PM

Frost42_24 and K.Q., thank you both for reading and commenting.

I also think you're right, and it isn't "quite possible." I wrote the poem out of an overflow of emotion that had no other outlet. I wish there were an antidote.

mg




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