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We Never Go There
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: December 16, 2021 05:53PM

We Never Go There

I heard the song of hope sung
When I was young and strong and helpless
Before the sound of the engines of war
Filled the ears of another and another generation
Waiting for the promise -- before the words
Were forgotten in preambles and death marches
And holy visions of someone else’s tomorrows.
I heard the sparrow waiting for its turn
When the world turned away from us to
Fill itself with black water and dust in our eyes.
What’s going on? The plastic dreams
Rising through blue skies and failed accomplishments
Intended for someone else’s grandchildren…they never came.


Re: We Never Go There
Posted by: mg (64.12.116.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 04:03PM

"I heard the sparrow waiting for its turn
When the world turned away from us to
Fill itself with black water and dust in our eyes"

Beautiful poem. I love this.

mg


Re: We Never Go There
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 12:20AM

mg,

You focus on the specific turn in the piece where the speaker shifts from political polemics to poetic vision. Good work.

amo,

Peter


Re: We Never Go There
Posted by: mg (205.188.116.---)
Date: December 22, 2021 05:26AM

smiling smiley Thank you, Peter.




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