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No Movement Today
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 04:17PM

No Movement Today

Trapped in my apartment
By my broken toe
I look at maps of the city
Exploring where I have been
And where I would like to be

Trapped in my brain
I explore what I feel
Instead of
What I can’t think
At the moment

The movement of the air
No movement of the air
At the moment
Just outside my head
Just outside my window
The trees no sway say
No breeze

No movement today


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 04:22PM

If, when I read this out loud, I pause between stanzas about half the time it takes to read the previous stanza, the emphasis seems to work well.


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.176.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 07:45PM

Peter,
If it's not fiction and you do have a broken toe, it's the second one I heard about this week...and sorry to learn of it.

The trees no sway say
No breeze

Is this what you meant to say with these lines or is there a typo?

As far as the poem goes, I've liked many others of yours more than this one.

Peace,
Mary

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 10/29/2009 08:19PM by UPMarty.


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 08:38PM

Mary,

I like the break between liking and disliking you express.

The ungrammaticality of the piece is exactly what I meant to make use of.

Actually, I never aim at a top ten in any of my poems...every one of them comes from its own sources, this time something in the so-called real world, my broken toe, was its occasion. Often my 'imaginary world' is also fruitful.


be that as it may, I was just writing about what I was thinking about this morning.

thanks for visiting,

Peter


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: les712 (68.116.82.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 09:28PM

Peter, sorry to hear about your toe. With the wind we've had the past few days, you may be better off inside for a while, though I'm thinkin I would not like being trapped inside for an extended period of time. Get well soon.

Les


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 10:07PM

Thanks, Les.

Who knows which way the wind blows.

amo,

Peter


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: October 29, 2021 10:39PM

My first broken digit
From playing hooky from summer school
Playing catcher
Instead playing with “The Lady of the Lake”--
After flunking freshman English,
I think, and flunking second year French,
refusing to take French in summer school,
against my adviser’s advice,
opting for Latin to get into college later,
getting my right thumb broken
by my best friend’s older brother,
‘Fish’ Olson...only forty-eight years ago.


Re: No Movement Today
Posted by: les712 (68.185.70.---)
Date: October 30, 2021 12:36PM

Who knows which way the wind blows.


Golfers.

Les




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