Release.
Offer.
Freeing up the mind.
Dying and living,
Deeply intertwined.
Purge.
Retch.
Expulsions flowing out.
Oozing, seeping,
Removal of the rot.
Inhale.
Receive.
Calming
down
the mind.
Living and growing,
Deeply intertwined.
sheziff,
I like all of this, including the staccato, shorter lines. Nice job...I especially like the thoughtfulness that went into it.
ps, I read much about religion. Right now I'm focused on the evolution of Greek religion, as distinguished from Greek philosophy and literature, and am for the time being greatly suspicious of male gods for some reason. I know very little about your 'Him.'
Cheers,
Peter
Thank you. Originally, the first 2 words of stanzas one and two were exclamatory. I have never had any formal poetry training and thought maybe this was not appropriate. Feedback?
My "Him" is the pronoun I choose to give to the spiritual power that is greater than myself. This is my understanding of this power. I also choose to call Him God.
Blessings,
Sheila
Sheila,
As far as I'm concerned, anything is ok in poetry that works for the poem itself.
Cheers,
Peter
Pete, as you learn more about our gods in Greece, you will find that godesses are not someone you'd want to take a check from either.
Sheila, I've read this a few times, not much to say about it, but I like the ying yang feel I get from it.
Les