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Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: Lennonwolf (96.50.145.---)
Date: July 19, 2021 10:41PM

Water smoothed as keyboard white and black 
wilted as I could only be in autumn
less than strangers atop the hood, ’96 Toyota dreamed
Windows down - windows always down back then;
music soft with so little time
to be running out.

 
Sombre moment in tortoise-shell light
-far-off moon
-far-off all
You ask me something purposeful, something to
what might come next.

 
“Stay with me,” I think and say.
You cast your eyes to the side, half nodding half sitting
silent before Blackly Pool and still waters ink.

 
Oh, but for those edges in a night.
Those trees dark in their waving circle.

 
As to how a moon in autumn can be the best thing to see
(A world beyond portrait)
with frosted winter and dreamt golden spring?

 
Ask the beautiful girl and the lonely boy
sitting listening to tunes
beside Blackly Pool
at night.

Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: July 19, 2021 11:27PM

Thanks for sharing this.

Peter


Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: les712 (68.116.92.---)
Date: July 20, 2021 03:50AM

Good one, Lennon, I enjoyed the read.

Les


Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: Lennonwolf (96.50.145.---)
Date: July 21, 2021 12:01AM

Thanks for the nice comments, this one wasn't an easy one to write, and not for any reason I can see; was trying to find something that wasn't willing to show itself, lol


Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: November 20, 2021 02:02AM

bump for quality


Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.178.---)
Date: November 24, 2021 01:01AM

Wow, well done for sure. Thanks for bumping.

Mary


Re: Blackly Pool Stilled
Posted by: frost42_24 (98.226.171.---)
Date: December 01, 2021 11:58PM

I agree with Peter. Very high quality, indeed. Enjoyed very much.




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