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another planet
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: June 17, 2022 09:28PM

another planet

daytime tv
takes place
on another planet

on another planet
the wave of intelligence
slows down

we turn around
on another planet
to find the sun is in
our eyes

the sun is in
our eyes and our eyes
are closed

on tv we live
on another planet


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Re: another planet
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: June 17, 2022 09:31PM

This poem is 'about' the next line, the one that does not appear at the end of the text.


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Re: another planet
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: June 18, 2022 04:22AM

on tv we live
on another planet


I've often wondered why it seemed so alien to me. Great observation, Peter.



Les


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Re: another planet
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: June 18, 2022 01:52PM

Thanks, Les.

Peter


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