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Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: June 14, 2022 02:10AM

In silence and darkness I watch myself
Traject through mind
Temper soul
Wonder why I'm so rare

Madness is not so great
That rewards could ever pale
Nore we so large, or small
And I've seen others

I've been welcomed into the thoughts of lesser
And seen everything I am
Moved the pieces, replicated myself
But still

Grim faced, deep creased
I feed the ailments of mind
A bloodshot eye maintaining sanity
Another seeing how so many could fall


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: June 14, 2022 04:02PM

A nice journey into the self. I enjoyed this one Percival.

Les


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: June 15, 2022 12:26AM

Good work,

Peter


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: June 30, 2021 02:39AM

I agree it's good work. I am still determined to find the optimist that is hiding deep deep within the creases and ailments. I think he's in there somewhere-the revolutionary happy man. But then again, I dared to think we might become friends once, so what the hell do I know? heh.

I do know that I like the way you can express the deep self reflection and share with the reader the mindset you are in...and I like the fact that you are willing to be so vulnerable. I think this was great writing...friend, or no.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: June 30, 2021 02:07PM

Don't get so down, I am not befriended without turmoil. As for optimism, I wouldn't go that far. I find it wasteful. When I want something done, I go about doing it, filling my head with the calculations required of me to accomplish my goal, is that optimism? Or is optimism hope? Hope the perceived possible benefit of an action? If that's the case, then I am optimistic, thinking things will get better, in part. But I am doomed, my ultimate goal is an impossibility, life is too large, I too small. Defeated to begin, the only pleasure I take is in the progression of my fatally sane goal, one chance in all the numbers that fit within existence.

Vulnerable? No. I show my strength in this. I show my weaknesses, yes, but I also show I've overcome them, and in this my immunity to their future occurrence. I am bragging.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 12:50AM

Yes. I get it...and I agree you are showing strength. I was trying to compliment you. Maybe I should've been more obvious. I like you.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 01:11AM

That's fair to know, and obvious is the only path to take with me. But what use have I for you? Love is a hobby to me, not to interfere with the important things in life, I have no desire to start a family, and you are not near enough, nor proven enough, to make casual sex viable. So, you like me, fair enough. What do you intend to do about it?


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 04:57PM

She should just woop you ass and set you out to pasture like them other would be macho-studs,

amo,

Peter


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 06:01PM

I'm sorry peter, I'm not into guys.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 07:58PM

me neither, but it often sounds like you think with your balls.

cheers,

Peter


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 08:44PM

Mr P, I didn't mean I like you like I want you...though, I'm sure you're quite desirable. I meant, I like you...like one friend would like another and enjoy them; their humor,their style, or in our case, that and their poetry, wit, etc. I'm married, so I am not propositioning for love or sex.

To spell it out, I am trying to be your friend. I thought we covered this several months ago. I've got too many hobbies already and am about to adopt new born twins this month, so no worries.You are safe.

Sherry


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: July 02, 2021 11:08PM

That's really too bad, I'm in the market for a female. As to friendship, unlikely. My friends do as I do, you have yet to show those signs. Acquaintance is a far more obtainable goal.



Peter,

Before you decide to share your perceptions of reality with others, recall that you are delusional. As such, you spout nothing but falsehood. Speaking false is the same as poisoning a person, only their mind. So, pay attention now. Your pathetic delusions hurt people, you hurt people, I have thus made you aware, continue at your own risk.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: July 03, 2021 01:07AM

oh no not again I offended the child...you would think by now I'd know enough never to address him

actually I did realize I would offend you by saying what I did, but I do come from a sub-culture that enjoys hurting people, from which I suppose I am not entirely liberated

still, I like your meditative pieces and am anoyed that you play the silly roles you do in these threads when you obviously do have what it takes to think seriously when you don't get all messed up by issues of image

as to me be delusional, that is not one of the problems I do have, as flawed as I may be

cheers,

Peter

p.s.,

I would rather see more of your creative stuff than your ranting.

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 07/04/2022 10:19PM by petersz.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: July 03, 2021 12:25PM

"We do not see the world the way it is, but as we are."

You do not have your intended effects on me, old fool. I have yet to nullify you out of pity, not benevolence. Though if you'd like to try and irritate me, by all means continue. Maybe you'll accomplish this lofty goal and have your turn before me.


Re: Time Walk
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: July 04, 2021 12:08AM

wow....seriously.




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