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Poetic Truth
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.148.---)
Date: June 02, 2022 12:18PM

I read your poems today
and now a silent serenade
begins to play;
almost a symphony
as notes light up to dance
uniquely through each line
and proudly twirl and prance
iambic minuets so fine

the purity of melody
is in poetic prosody
that versifies the soul
and feeds a need down deep
that bubbles up to bleed
artistic beauty from the depths of sleep

syncopated cornice
of cacophonous percussion pounds
the rhythmic repetition found
in beauty's mystical spirit -
creating a painting of life

a multi-syllabic tonality
in auditory purity
is precious pleasure bound
around a total sound
of disambiguated fusion found;
imbued and fused poetic truth of youth

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 06/02/2022 08:18PM by easyeverett.


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: June 02, 2022 12:52PM

Tom, I really enjoyed this one, succinct and powerful.

Les


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.148.---)
Date: June 02, 2022 05:06PM

Hi Les and thank you for the kind words my friend.
I am pleased you enjoyed this one Les. Your friend, tom


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: June 02, 2022 05:58PM

Tom:

A lot to admire here...for example, the musicality in these lines: the purity of melody/is in poetic prosody/that versifies the soul...and in these ...a multi-syllabic tonality/ in auditory purity/is precious pleasure bound.


I'm puzzled though about how a "silent serenade begins to play a symphony." That seems a a physical impossibility, even when considering poetic license. Perhaps "a silent serenade begins to swell into a symphony," or something along those lines, might be more appropriate. Then, again, perhaps not. At any rate, I love this piece.

Joe

Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 06/02/2022 05:59PM by hpesoj.


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.148.---)
Date: June 02, 2022 08:17PM

You are correct and I think i fixed it Joe. Check it out.
I thank you friend. tom


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: June 03, 2022 06:59AM

I think i fixed it

You did.


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.148.---)
Date: June 03, 2022 07:11PM

Yes, Joe, your observation saved this poetic my friend. I like
it now which has moved me much further on this one than I thought
I would get. That is why, even in my more clinical writing, a good
and creative editor is vital if not essential to my work. You have
shown that same quality for poetics Joe and I am tickled to death
you have that gift. tom


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: June 03, 2022 07:16PM

Just noting my presence.


Re: Poetic Truth
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.148.---)
Date: June 03, 2022 07:45PM

Hi Mr. P. Presence noted, recorded, and posterity has been saved.




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