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In a Day
Posted by: aaron (75.100.224.---)
Date: May 29, 2022 04:44AM

In a day
It will be alright
The shadows will
Touch the treetops

The tides will
Cast their broad nets
The stars blanket
The night sky

In a day
It will be alright


Re: In a Day
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 29, 2022 11:57AM

Nice little ditty here, Aaron.

Les


Re: In a Day
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 29, 2022 02:01PM

Aaron,

This poem expresses exactly how I feel this morning:

In a day
It will be alright
The shadows will
Touch the treetops ...


...but not today....but not today.



Good work,

Peter


Re: In a Day
Posted by: aaron (71.193.157.---)
Date: May 30, 2022 02:10PM

Les, thanks for reading

Peter, it has been one day, and the world is still spinning. Hope it all worked out for ya.



cheers


Re: In a Day
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: May 31, 2022 07:12AM

aaron:

I like the feeling of hope expressed here.

Joe


Re: In a Day
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: June 07, 2022 05:43AM

I like you style.


Re: In a Day
Posted by: aaron (71.193.157.---)
Date: June 07, 2022 11:50PM

Joe and Frost, thank you both for the comments.

Glad you liked it. Reading it again now, it seems quite cliche, at least the part about the stars blanketing the night sky. Thanks for bringing it up for me to reread!


Re: In a Day
Posted by: Cynara (4.237.202.---)
Date: June 23, 2022 01:59AM

Usually the things of LIGHT bring hope. In this poem it is the shadows and the stars which do. So it is the night that comforts, not the day. Interesting reversal...the image of the broad nets of the tides I like especially. Cf. Swinburne: "This woven raiment of nights and days, / were it once cast off and unwound from me..." ("The Triumph of Time"). ~ Cynara




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