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Broken
Posted by: aaron (71.193.157.---)
Date: May 06, 2022 01:35AM

Waves break on shallow rocks
And I break with them,
But as the waves return back to the sea
I remain
Broken on a shore


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Re: Broken
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 06, 2022 02:24AM

I like this one, succinct and successful.


Les


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Re: Broken
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 06, 2022 03:24AM

ditto,

Peter


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Re: Broken
Posted by: frost42_24 (32.170.255.---)
Date: May 06, 2022 04:31PM

Aaron, I agree that this "rocks"...get it? heh? not funny...I tried. This is right on the money...sometimes I'm that person flattened beside you by the water...I really liked this one.


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Re: Broken
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 11, 2022 01:36PM

forward


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