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As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: April 22, 2022 09:47PM

As I Looked Down at Him

The lines of blood
Collected in the corner
Of his eye made
My urgency absurd
And I only wanted
To tender to his need
Without betraying
The pity
Which would be the sign
Of our weakness.


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: UPMarty (71.87.67.---)
Date: April 22, 2022 10:23PM

To tender to his need
Without betraying
The pity
Which would be the sign
Of our weakness.


I'm not sure what to make of these lines, Peter, or the poem for that matter, but I always like to read what you write.

Mary


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: April 23, 2022 04:17AM

It seems this whole poem is taken out of some unknown context, Peter, but it has the potential of being a very provocative piece.

Les


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: April 23, 2022 08:33AM

A lot of emotion and truth rings through these brief lines, Peter. I'm confused though by "our" in the last line. Is it referring solely to the speaker and subject, or is it a universal "our?"

Joe


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: April 23, 2022 12:31PM

Joseph,

When I wrote it I meant 'his and mine,' but poems mean what they mean beyond any author's intent, so...'universal' also works here.

Sorry folks that a greater context in this case would be a betrayal, so the reader has to provide that, except maybe some of you have seen a friend's bloodshot eyes accidentally, and know something he or she did not want to know or did not want public.

Thank you all for writing.

Peter


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: April 23, 2022 01:09PM

Thanks for responding Peter. Actually, I like the enigma as it adds a slightly different nuance to the poem when I interchange meanings.

Joe


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 11, 2022 10:11PM

forward


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.165.---)
Date: May 12, 2022 04:55PM

bump
Remarkable and as you state Peter, universal. tom


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 12, 2022 10:10PM

Thanks, tom

btw,

Thanks for hanging in there after that barrage I laid on you. As a fellow bipolar, I have my own obsessions.

Cheers,

Peter


Re: As I Looked Down at Him
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.165.---)
Date: May 13, 2022 09:05AM

Hell Peter, I don't want to miss your posts. Barrage all you want
but I'll stick like glue to read the stuff you write. Now Mr. P
maybe not. lol. tom




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