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Posted by: AngelsFear (210.4.62.---)
Date: March 25, 2022 06:26AM

Squint then eyes wide,
like "off and on".
The other side: the tides
on a pre-sunset afternoon.

Doubling, later, the darkness
at 6:30 ; eyes on shades...
of memories...
This summer will be made.


Re: SUB
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: March 25, 2022 03:11PM

Why do I enjoy this so much, AngelsFear? I know it is not because I entirely grasp the scene, though it's not entirely alien. I do like your staccato delivery.

amo,

Peter


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Posted by: AngelsFear (210.4.62.---)
Date: March 26, 2022 04:57AM

Thanks Peter. It just occurred to me while I was on a bus trip last week . Hey, I thought I'd post it here. It was around 5 pm, The sun was about to set and I kept on squinting everytime the Sun's rays hit my eye So I looked on the other side. It was a cool view. Thanks for enjoying it.

By the way, summer is here in my place.

Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 03/26/2009 05:01AM by AngelsFear.


Re: SUB
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 05, 2022 01:18AM

bump


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Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 05, 2022 11:42AM

Very hopeful poem, AF, nice read.

Les




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