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Erased
Posted by: easyeverett (75.170.166.---)
Date: March 21, 2022 12:05PM

Take Care Everyone.

Edited 7 time(s). Last edit at 03/29/2009 08:50PM by easyeverett.


Re: If Convergence of Emergence Is Happening Still!
Posted by: IanAKB (124.168.65.---)
Date: March 27, 2022 07:15AM

Easy, you are so prolific in your posts, and your style changes so much faster than the cloudscapes, that I can hardly keep up with reading, let alone trying to make appropriate comments.

I admire your dedication to rhyme (both end, and internal), but sometimes think that you pursue it with more dedication than the poem needs. In this poem for instance. It can become distracting and confusing.

I am left puzzled as to what your overall point or theme is in this poem.

What would your own critique of it be?

Ian


Re: If Convergence of Emergence Is Happening Still!
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: March 28, 2022 12:38AM

Go for it, Ian.


Re: Erased
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: April 01, 2022 03:57PM

Well, we've lost Tom's enthusiasm for the moment. I hope not permanently. He is a great addition to the forum. I think it is always a mistake to entirely withdraw from criticism, even though it can be devastating.

I hope you do return, Tom.

Peter


Re: Erased
Posted by: IanAKB (203.217.76.---)
Date: April 01, 2022 06:30PM

Well I'm sorry if - after holding off from critiquing lots of his poems - I scared him off with what I thought was a fair, and fairly mild, comment on one of them, and a question designed to get a better understanding of his attitude towards poetry - see above. That was it. (He responded in a separate thread headed 'Sorry'). My reference to 'cloudscapes' reflected some reference to clouds that was in his now erased poem, if I'm recalling it correctly.

Tom said in one of his threads that he was bipolar. I inferred from his prolific postings that he was in an elevated phase of that not uncommon condition. Usually that brings an over-robust attitude of mind. So I didn't expect his confidence to be so fragile.

Tom is welcome in the forum. He doesn't have to take any notice of me.

Ian

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 04/01/2022 06:35PM by IanAKB.


Re: Erased
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (94.249.75.---)
Date: April 01, 2022 07:05PM

I think your comment is "fair, and fairly mild". I like your comments Ian and appreciate what I can learn from them. As I hope Tom changes his mind, I do not think your words are responsible for his departure. That is a choice, he can undo!

Be well.


Re: Erased
Posted by: easyeverett (75.170.165.---)
Date: April 01, 2022 08:41PM

Ian, it was not your critique at all. It is a product of my new
meds. Sometimes it garbles the brain to change medications and
that is my reason for erasing my garbled poem. lol. I did not mean
to infer your words were out of order, in fact, they were spot on.
I just fight this damnable disease constantly so I hope this clears
up my reason for departure at this time. Thanks to all. tom


Re: Erased
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (212.35.66.---)
Date: April 02, 2022 04:59AM

Be well, Tom. We do enjoy your poetry here! I am glad you have clarified.


Re: Erased
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 08, 2022 03:49AM

Tom, Here's my response to Terry on my thread. It pertains to how much space you take on the board.

amo,

Peter

Merc,

re: Tom pushing people off. I figure he's old enough to be able to know that he is doing that and that it is not fair to all those who only post once in a while. I guess, Terry, that your mentioning to me is sufficient to motivate me to say something to him. As an anarchist, I'm sure you know how much I hate being anyone else's cop or daddy or conscience, but I will take on the task.

Thanks for stopping by to read the poem.

amo,

Peter


Re: Erased
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 11, 2022 02:46PM

Tom, you've been a valuable contributor to the forum. I, for one, shall miss your writing.

Les




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