Our daily inclinations thrive
In syncopated majesty.
Exquisite notes that soon arrive
Chauffeured by complexity.

The downbeats in-between each bridge
Concussive absolution made.
Relinquish riffs that ride the ridge
Like jazz within my soul inlaid.

Repetition reconstruction,
Constant periodicity.
Represent a new instruction,
Calmed with heated harmony.

Create inventive brilliance please
And put it on the page with jazz.
Progressive interdictions squeeze
The pounding beats the drummer has.

Oh please now play your saxophone,
Melodious the notes abound.
And listen to love's tempered tone,
That stimulates the secrets found.

I think of Coltrane's Karma now,
His genius does prevail in dreams.
When Krupa's on the skins I bow,
It makes appreciation scream.

Jazz music is the magic craved,
Improvisation takes the lead.
I honor Billy, in her grave;
She had a soul that made you bleed.

So stand and then salulte the greats
Who left their mark on life contrived.
Through jazz you interrupt the fates,
Profound the pleasure that's arrived.

Oh mighty golden symbol be,
A scintillating rhythm found.
The glory of jazz history,
When sacrificial brass is crowned!

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 02/19/2009 10:10AM by easyeverett.

Tom:

Very entertaining homage to a uniquely American art form. A couple of minor points:

1. S1 L4: The word "life's" throws the rhythm off kilter. Is it really necessary?

2. S8 L2: Admittedly, this is a matter of personal preference (and a nit, surely) but using "that" when referring to people always sounds awkward to me. I don't think there's anything wrong with it technically, but I prefer "who" when introducing a clause giving further information about a person or people previously mentioned.

3. The last stanza sounds forced and strained to my ear...unworthy of that which came before.

These minor points aside, this is another enjoyable read. Thanks.

Joe

You are so righ on all three corrections Joe. I mispronounced "chauffeured" with the stress on second syllable chauFFEURED instead of the correct CHAUF feured. So it now reads:

Exquisite notes that soon arrive
Chauffeured by complexity.........'life's' has been removed Joe.


So stand and then salulte the greats
Who left their mark on life contrived.
Through jazz you interrupt the fates,
Profound the pleasure that's arrived.....Pure laziness on my part Joe. Hope this
correction is adequate.

The last stanza sucked and has been eliminated completely. Thank you for
making my poem better. That, sir, is the purpose of read and review and you
did it superbly. tom

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 02/19/2009 10:11AM by easyeverett.