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To end the night
Posted by: G.S (94.249.16.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 12:55PM

To end the night

Bloodshot eyes
And sore tomorrows
Awoken nights
So filled with sorrow
I take in my last breath
And remember the day
When all I would do
And all I would say
Freed the essence
That is me

Tumbling walls
And uneven bricks
Razed by a beast
And I, unable to fix
I swear I’ll fight
Tomorrow at dusk
Or maybe tonight
Eventually we’ll win
We'll end the night


Re: To end the night
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (79.173.228.---)
Date: February 12, 2022 01:59PM

I like the spirit of this Ghalia. I hope it has not been overlooked because you never seem to interact. I like the new style you are developing. It is compact, condence and ambiguous rather than vague. Keep it up. I am enjoying!

K.Q.


Re: To end the night
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: February 12, 2022 08:28PM

Eventually we’ll win ... yet the night comes back, so we must be vigilant.

amo,

Peter


Re: To end the night
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: February 22, 2022 06:39PM

bump




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