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loss
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.185.193.---)
Date: January 12, 2022 04:46PM

it's sad when you realize
all you have in common
are the memories you made
before everything unraveled

and even digging in the archives
to rediscover the first marvels
that set your loving heart in motion
doesn't offer resurrection
to what has long since died

a sigh-
then another-
atop long stretched moments
trying fruitlessly to reconstruct
all the joy razed by indifference

and years of complacency converge
with clenched teeth tension
and tight throat choking
on all the shit you swallowed
trying to keep it together

trying not to give way
to the sorrow edging in
fighting and fearing
looking for the courage to face
the submission to defeat

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 01/16/2009 01:04PM by frost42_24.


Re: loss
Posted by: Merc (75.211.18.---)
Date: January 13, 2022 11:34AM

Frosty,
It's good, personally I'd use something other than the slang term for feces. But then, that is not my favorite kind of language. It put a hard stop in the poem for me.
Other than that... A with that B+


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 13, 2022 03:56PM

I swear I will never understand you Merc. You kill men for a living and can't take curse words.

Anyway, good shit frost.


Re: loss
Posted by: Merc (75.211.94.---)
Date: January 13, 2022 04:46PM

The fact that you don't understand me looks good on my resume.

Profanity, vulgarity and slang cursing is mearly the audiomanifestation of a feeble, bewildered, or inferior mind attempting desprately to express itself forceably.


Re: loss
Posted by: frost42_24 (32.138.127.---)
Date: January 13, 2022 10:54PM

'merc thanks for reading and commenting. While I can see you point of view, I disagree that all use of strong language is done out of ignorance...Mr.P, am glad you liked and you make me smile...


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 12:20AM

I.. na, fuck it.


Re: loss
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 12:29AM

Me?...I like strong language and strong women...but, both wear me out.

There are no prohibited words in my vocabulary.


btw, frosty, I slipped on the word 'shit' in the poem also...it gave a sense of your anger, but I did enjoy the poem, despite my over-active imagination running off to the bathroom to spit out shit...ugh! is that an image?


Re: loss
Posted by: frost42_24 (32.141.108.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 11:04PM

Peter, the only other words thjat came to mind were "things or crap" and neither accurately represented the intensity of the emotion so I went with shit. as for strong language and women being exhausting I am always up front about who I am from the start and come sporting a warning label.heh. mr.p...what the F?

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 01/14/2009 11:06PM by frost42_24.


Re: loss
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 11:55PM

All the women, Frosty, who have put up with me for more than a week have been strong. Some of the so-called macho men I've known who have implied that I am somehow strange because I like strong women can go Fuck themselves...blah, blah, blah. I have certainly been glad you were strong.

amo,

Petr


Re: loss
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (24.189.156.---)
Date: January 14, 2022 11:59PM

"Not all of us who drink are poets. Some of us drink because we're not poets"

Arthur


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 15, 2022 12:00AM

Just messing with Merc. Side note, if a woman doesn't have an even chance of killing me, I won't have anything to do with her.


Re: loss
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (24.189.156.---)
Date: January 15, 2022 12:09AM

Even chance? I'd say a fair number of them even have a motive


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 15, 2022 01:45AM

No, no, women love me.


Re: loss
Posted by: UPMarty (24.247.69.---)
Date: January 15, 2022 08:10AM

I like the way you present the uncomfortable feeling in this, frosty

and years of complacency converge
with clenched teeth tension
and tight throat choking
on all the shit you swallowed
trying to keep it together


and even digging ............
don't offer resurrection
(I think "don't" should be doesn't)

I remember feeling this way after the loss of a relationship. It didn't get better until I realized that we had more in common than just the good memories of what brought us together in the first place. The angst was shared as well. It didn't make the loss any cheerier, but it did help to see more than the loss when looking back.

Enjoyed.
Mary


Re: loss
Posted by: Merc (75.211.97.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 12:54PM

Urine, you are mistaking sympathy for love. They think you suffer from brain damage.


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 10:43PM

Quite likely, I fear.


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 11:04PM

But, let me ask you something, Merc. Do you have any pennies in your home?


Re: loss
Posted by: Merc (75.210.78.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 11:14PM

Pennies and pesos, pfenigs and dimes. Pharoahs and paupers, poodles and mimes.
I have all the walrus said of to speak, shoes, and sealing wax, a valley and peak.
In tropic sun the whale shark will bask, but, P, Mr. P, just why do you ask?


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 11:21PM

Well, I have bad news.

[www.youtube.com]


Re: loss
Posted by: Merc (75.210.78.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 11:28PM

I suspose in some circles that was cute.


Re: loss
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 16, 2022 11:34PM

Oh really?


Re: loss
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (24.189.156.---)
Date: January 17, 2022 01:43AM

One at a time, of course




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