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Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (68.194.80.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 11:26AM

Remnants of the hordes of creepy gigolos
Embedded in the facets of her hideous clammy futon
The groggiest abstraction, surrendered to the sunlight
Still insoluble in spite of time of day


Re: Physicus
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (94.249.104.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 11:56AM

What an "gigolos" "insoluble" "abtstraction" that must have been!! Try salt!

K.Q.


Re: Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (68.194.80.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 12:09PM

I know that salt will get the slugs, but maybe not the trail they leave behind


Re: Physicus
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 12:11PM

Yuk!...the insoluble remnants left behind in the futon by the hordes of creepy gigolos, that is...not the poem. Time to refurnish, I'd say.


Re: Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (68.194.80.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 02:33PM

"Even sleepers are workers and collaborators in what goes on in the Universe."

Heraclitus


Re: Physicus
Posted by: Steevo (69.19.14.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 03:21PM

Very effective rendering of image words. It does something for me, but I don't think I'll tell the images it dredges up.
I especially like that I like it and I don't like it. Don't get that feeling often enough. Thanks for the offering.
Steve


Re: Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (71.249.169.---)
Date: January 06, 2022 04:19PM

“Men are disturbed not by things, but by the views which they take of them”
Epictetus


Re: Physicus
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 07, 2022 12:21PM

I always had a suspicion that we would get along.


Re: Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (71.249.169.---)
Date: January 07, 2022 12:49PM

We actually do get along pretty well, probably because I don't have a seething hatred of you...it's more of a chronic loathing, but you're such a good sport about it !


Re: Physicus
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.63.---)
Date: January 07, 2022 10:34PM

I find the worst enemies tend to make the best friends.


Re: Physicus
Posted by: JohnnyBoy (24.189.156.---)
Date: January 08, 2022 07:59AM

Especially in light of the fact that we've both deliberately and intentionally insulted each other over the years, yet continue to maintain an amiable relationship




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