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Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 03:38AM

It's different this year
Something is missing
and it's as if doing without it
might be the only hope
of bringing it back

to forgo the tinsel
and trappings
of plummeting markets
fuel fluctuations
tangled lights
burnt fuses
broken bulbs
and broken everything

it's as if it calls for
doing nothing
but giving the man
who slept in his car last night
ten dollars so he can get home


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: les712 (68.185.69.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 05:40AM

Tis the season, Mary, to think of others, beautifully done here.


Les


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 07:04AM

The spirit of Christmas, beautifully expressed. Well done.


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 03:33PM

Thanks Les and Joe. It's beginning to look a lot like Christmas!

Mary


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 05:56PM

yes to the sentiment and yes to the poem.

go for it.

peter


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 07:34PM

yes, Peter, thanks.

Mary


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: Merc (75.208.200.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 11:47PM

What time of year is it?


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 11:55PM

time to start again, my friend, hoping we can all get it a little righter, ay wot?

Peter


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: Steevo (69.19.14.---)
Date: December 22, 2021 12:46AM

Good one Mary.

Yes, I feel that line....."and broken everything".

Getting back to the feeling of giving sounds right. I like the nod to the people who ring the bells too.

It makes me think of Yeats.

And twenty minutes more or less
It seemed so great my happiness
That I could bless, and be blessed.

Hope you have a blessed Christmas, with or without tinsel.

Steve


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 22, 2021 06:41PM

Thanks, Steve. I'm really not in the mood for all the frills this year. But somehow I think like in whoville, it will come just the same. And we'll probably be better off celebrating with less of the hupla. Hope you have a blessed Christmas too.

Mary


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: lifeisbutadream (94.249.73.---)
Date: December 23, 2021 03:54PM

I really like the title. Alone it says a lot!

K.Q.


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: redmitten (216.187.184.---)
Date: December 23, 2021 05:44PM

love the title.

like the sentiment about doing without. too much going on this time of year that we cannot focus on what this time of year is truly about.

merry christmas everyone.

redmittengirl


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 23, 2021 09:56PM

Thanks, K.Q.. I guess those kettles are universal. Good to hear from you.

Thanks mitts.

Mary


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: larkinabout (86.158.156.---)
Date: December 23, 2021 10:21PM

Tis a fine sentiment Mary, have you followed it through though?

I find the Christmas do-gooders a royal pain in the ass. Bloody middle class Christians...

Yeh once a year! The real people are at it all year round, with no seeking of approval, they just go about their business quietly, helping and loving.

Sorry, i wasn't having a go at your poem, it does spark some debate though:

Courage of your convictions and all that.

cheers
Kris


Re: Red Metal Kettles
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: December 24, 2021 02:14AM

Howdy Chris..

Debate seems to be the word of the day. Nah, when he asked for the money, I told him to go suck an egg or stop back on Christmas and I might consider it.

A pleasure as always,

Mary




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