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A Step Away
Posted by: TommyTuffNuts22 (71.226.202.---)
Date: December 17, 2021 09:26PM

The day I pealed fresh eyes
To view the world
For the first time
Innocence intact
I went on the run
Never looking back
My fragile feet blistered
Beating against the gravel
As if I were mimicking the erratic melody
Of a homicidal heart beat
The beach painted my toes in red
As if the grains of sand
Were billions of burning coals
I longed for an oasis that I could never reach
All the while learning lessons
A professor couldn’t teach
My footprints covered the peak of Everest
As if the snow were wet cement
I was 29 000 feet tall
Screaming, “who am I” into the quiet
I am me after all
Echoed as if I were preaching
Into an empty bottle of my favorite whiskey
Smoke billowed from my fingertip
As if it were a loaded gun
As I carved my signature into the sun
God was just a step away
And again I was on the run

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 12/18/2008 01:04PM by TommyTuffNuts22.


Re: A Step Away
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: December 18, 2021 02:15AM

Good ending, TommyTuffNuts22.

Should 'into the quite ' be 'into the quiet '?

Peter


Re: A Step Away
Posted by: les712 (68.185.69.---)
Date: December 18, 2021 02:50PM

Nicely done, Tommy, a good read.


Les


Re: A Step Away
Posted by: Steevo (69.19.14.---)
Date: December 19, 2021 02:09PM

Great stuff! This is real, and from the gut in language I can relate to.

"I am me after all" seems to sum it up.
Thanks for sharing this.

Steve


Re: A Step Away
Posted by: purekitty5 (72.87.246.---)
Date: December 20, 2021 05:08AM

good poem..i like how it just all comes together


Re: A Step Away
Posted by: Mr. P (75.111.26.---)
Date: December 21, 2021 12:22AM

Tommy, Tommy, I'd feared you would be as, perhaps Steevo recently put it, a drive-by poem poster. That is, posting one poem and never returning. I'm happy to see otherwise as your continued contributions enrich the mule.




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