I am a poetry fan who just recently discovered this awesome web site and I'm overjoyed. I write a lot of poetry and am hoping for some constructive (or not) criticism. Here's one:
Shadows of you fill my night's
Wishing on an unknown star
A silent song betray's my heart
Loving pure and chaste from afar
Haunting ghosts of failure's past
Forbid my lips from speech
Imprisoned, bound with iron strong
A soul far out of reach.
Hope on deathbed lies
Striving for every last breath
Buried, yet never forgotten
For love is stronger than death.
desire-
Welcome to the site.
If you post this on 'User Submitted Poetry' it WILL get comments.
Jack
Desire, you do need to post this on the User Submitted Poetry forum. Also, make sure you have a title, or at least a subject for the poem, and have checked for grammatical and spelling errors.
Les
Thanks for the advice, people. How do I post on the 'User submitted poetry' section?
The same way you did here. Hit new topic at the top of the page and type, or paste your writing there.
Les